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Peaceful Spring

Bitterly cold winter may once come, but now it has gone. As my bike has been stolen, I have to run from one teaching building to another every day.

The bell declares the end of the last lesson and the beginning of a new journey.Tired as I am, at the sight of the bench, I go straight to it.As soon as I get seated, a world of fresh green immediately catches my eyes.Grass sprouts burst through the soil—right in the place of the withered grass—and turn the dull grey into fresh green.As I look up, I find those tall trees have also put on new clothes.Green, here and there, everywhere!Spring has come, I realize suddenly.

A breeze stirs, sending over breaths of fragrance.I trace it, surprised to find several lovely small white flowers dotted on a tree.And there are even some singing birds! I am so delighted with all these tiny lives that my fatigue vanishes all of a sudden.

The sky shows its purest blue.The sun generously gives out its heat and light, shining evenly on the grass, on the trees,on the roofs of houses, on the people passing by, also on me, quietly and tenderly.There come a couple of young people, strolling leisurely.A group of students are sitting in a circle on the grass and discussing something heatedly.Some are reading English but in low voices—afraid of breaking the peace of the campus.Others are lying on the lawn, having a nap, or just enjoying the sunshine as I am.

I feel I am free, free of thinking anything.In such a pleasing environment, doing anything is a great pleasure.I am fully indulged in this tranquility.If only time could stop!

I turn on the radio to enjoy some light music.Much to my disappointment, however, almost all the programs are about the war in Iraq.It is hard to believe that under the same blue sky, some people are suffering from bleeding and death of war while others are enjoying a happy life.

The sun is hidden by the clouds.After a few seconds, it shines brightly again.

Peaceful life seems to have gone, but it will come back one day, I am sure.

简评

本文中,作者描述了在草地的长凳上小憩片刻时的所见所闻,充满了生活的气息。跟随着作者的目光,我们看到了破土而出的一片嫩绿,预示着春天的来临;微风送来芬芳的花儿,唱歌的小鸟,湛蓝的天空,柔和的阳光。然后,看到了来往的人们,有悠闲散步的情侣,围坐一群的学生,有的在朗读英语,有的在草地上小憩片刻。作者感受到了一片安宁。收音机中播报的有关伊拉克战事的消息让作者联想到在同一片蓝天之下,有些人在享受生活,而有些118人饱受着战乱之苦。文章的结尾颇蕴哲理:正如乌云散去后就有阳光普照,和平总有一天会来临。

本文好似信笔拈来,但字里行间充满了作者对生活的感悟,流露出对战争的厌恶和对和平与安宁的生活的向往。

(点评教师:黄莺)