A Bleak Winter

I was born in Guangdong, the southernmost province in mainland China where in winter the temperature seldom falls below 5℃.For the past 19 years, I had never seen snow.I couldn't remember from when I had been dreaming of seeing a real snow, and experiencing a bleak winter.

Before I entered the university, I had never expected the climate difference of Shanghai and Guangzhou.But as October came, the falling golden leaves and the chilly winds indicated that this winter would be cold.

October walked away in the whisper of the falling leaves. Winter approached in November, and then December.

The dazzling golden color already faded away, leaving only the bare branches sticking out into the frosty air.Grass that was once as thick as a fine cardigan carpet could no longer be found anywhere.What I saw were the slushy fields which were jade green in September.

I considered it a great fortune to watch the sun, which was mild, jumping off the horizon and into those bare branches. Even on sunny days, the temperature was still low.The campus was left deserted and lifeless.

Was this what I had been longing for? Could it be called a bleak winter? I thought I should feel satisfied.Shanghai is still in the south.I couldn't expect more.But there was still something in my mind, as it was only one step to my dream.I prayed every day for a snow.A slight one could be enough.Once again. God heard.

I'll never forget the morning of Christmas.On my way to the library, a white elf found its way into my coat.It took me more than a minute to realize what was happening.Believe it or not, it snowed.Suddenly I understood why God took all the signs of life away in winter.He must have been clearing up a stage for his spoiled kid—snow, to show off.

Tears welled up in my eyes, for my thankfulness to God and to the special, bleak winter.

简评

本文描写了一个在炎热的广州长大的女孩来到上海后经历的第一个冬天，第一场雪。秋天的金色逐渐褪去后，一切有生命的东西都不复存在，只留下光秃秃的树枝裸露在寒风中。作者对冬天的太阳印象深刻：尽管阳光普照，气温仍然很低。然而，作者并不满足于此，仍时时期盼着下雪。终于，下雪了，作者将飘进衣服的雪花比喻成a white elf，非常富有情趣，自然地流露出作者当时的欣喜之情。最后，作者对冬天万物凋零做了一个非常新颖但合理的解释：清扫舞台，为调皮的孩子——雪花上台做准备。

文章对作者渴望感受严冬，期盼下雪的心情的描写细腻生动，给人留下了深刻的印象。

（点评教师：黄莺）

姓名：王一清

学号：0255027