人间天堂

A Fascinating Scenery

姓名：陈彦

学号：0218013

I have never seen such a beautiful street, a track to be exact.Nobody will forget it once he rests his eyes on the absorbing scenery.The track is long and straight.A great many trees stand in line on either side of the track.They are so high, big and exuberant that the track is almost separated from the outside.Hence, when walking along it, you will feel as if you were in a corridor which is formed by trees.No one can understand the great nature until he is intoxicated by the perfect landscape especially in autumn and winter.

At sunset in autumn, the track has become a golden world. Leaves are fluttering in the air with the wind just like the dancing butterflies.More have covered the ground, giving the track a thick yellow blanket.The trees have turned brown.They look so impressive, because here brown is the only color besides golden.So golden leaves, a golden track and golden sunshine dress up the world in a splendid gown.

At dawn in winter, however, a silver world appears before 78 us.Now everything is white.Instead of the flying leaves, the white snow ornaments the world with its wonderful performances and the ground has changed its coat.And even the sunshine turns silver.Without leaves, the trees make friends with snow and prepare themselves for the Christmas.Silver snow, a silver track, silver trees and silver sunshine, the silver world also has its charm.

After reading my introduction, maybe you have a desire to enjoy it.Then don't hesitate.Let's go to seek it.

简评

本文描写了一条幽静的小径，两边长着茂盛的大树。作者选取了两个场景来描绘小径的美。第一个场景是秋天的日落，小径成了一个金色的世界。落叶在空中飞舞，落到地上，好像铺了一层厚厚的黄地毯。一眼望去，有金色的树叶、小径和阳光，仿佛进入一个童话世界。第二个场景是冬日的黎明，呈现在眼前的是一个银装素裹的世界——银色的雪、小径、树木和阳光。

文中，作者运用了各种修辞手法，有拟人，如the trees make friends with snow；有比喻，如Plenty of leaves? just like the dancing butterflies.More have covered the ground, giving the track a thick yellow blanket等，给文章增色不少。

笔者建议，文章最后最好能指明这条小径在何处。比如这是我的家乡，家乡的景美，但家乡人的心灵更美。写景的目的是为了抒情。

（点评教师：黄莺）

姓名：刘旸

学号：02 1 8087