复旦大学学生优秀英语作文选评
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A Star Teacher

Like most of my classmates, I regard our biochemistry teacher—Professor Wang Weida as a star teacher, for he has many of the qualities that students appreciate in an instructor.

First, he organizes the class well.We particularly welcome the schedules of assignments that he gives us at the beginning of the term.Having an idea of an entire frame of the knowledge planned to learn in the semester, we are able to budget our time more efficiently.Moreover, Professor Wang promptly corrects and returns papers and tests, which enables students to learn from their mistakes and to produce better work in their next assignments.

Second, he is patient.When introducing new and difficult points, he tries to explain it fully.What's more, he pays serious attention to all our questions.In his lecture, we never feel embarrassed to ask a weak or irrelevant question.

Third, Professor Wang expresses himself clearly.He does not speak too fast, and his voice is loud so that it can be heard by 36 everyone in the room.

Finally, he is really an interesting guy.He grasps the attention of his class through his sense of humor.To emphasize important points in a lecture, he often tells witty stories about it and impresses us deeply in laughing.

A thoughtful and dedicated man, Professor Wang is generally regarded as a successful university instructor.

简评

徐非姗同学的作文手稿是用工整清秀的花体字誊写在稿纸上,看起来清爽悦目。她的文笔也干净利落,绝少语法错误,句式长短交替,错落有致,显得自然清新。

本文记述了自己的生化老师王教授,从四个方面赞扬了王教授的优秀品质,结构清晰,表达流畅。从文字上看,作者的英语基本功比较扎实,虽然没有使用大词和复杂的句式,但整体风格质朴而和谐,是一篇比较出色的作文。

当然,介绍一位优秀的教师,一般采取的是记叙文的方式,而本文采取的是典型的议论文的形式,因而显得说理有余,亲切不足。建议从某一侧面或具体事件入手重点刻画老师的形象,会显得更为生动亲切。

(点评教师:孙东云)

姓名:郑楠

学号:02707 1 2