Teachers

I have been a student for 12 years.During this time, I have gained knowledge, met different people, and shaped my character.Teachers are an important factor.They are the guides, friends, help-providers, and even the enemies.In short, they are like actors playing different roles on the platform.Some of them are so impressive and unique that they are still clear in my mind.

Mr.He is a conscientious man with a pair of black-framed glasses.He goes to great lengths to provide us with knowledge. The more, the better.We are nailed on seats for 55 minutes rather than 45 minutes in one class, because in his mental dictionary there is no conception of“class over”until the teacher of the next class smiles at him at the door.With a book and a piece of chalk in his hands, he looks like a well-armed soldier, forcing us to take notes from the very first minute to the last.We have to fix our eyes on the blackboard for fear of missing a single word.So his class is really a trial to us.However, I must admit he is so logical and consistent in thinking that he provides us with knowledge in the clearest and the simplest way.The light of wisdom is shining behind those two black frames.Therefore, he is very welcome.

Things seem quite different in Miss Wang's class.Most of us are daydreaming! The way she speaks—the specific pauses and rhythm—makes it difficult for us to concentrate on anything she says.Her voice is like a lullaby that could drive a crying baby to sleep.The rest are obsessed with novels or homework. They are having a difficult time.They droop their heads as low as possible so as not to be detected.Meanwhile, some other students are fascinated by the scenery outside the window.It is unfair to Miss Wang to some extent.Once I even saw tears of anger and depression in her eyes.But her class is really very boring.She teaches politics, sometimes with reference to philosophy and economics.That should have interested us, but she just repeats what the textbook says and provides no examples in reality.And seldom does she display quotations and illustrations. Miss Wang is supposed to improve her way of teaching.

Mr.Zhang is my Chinese teacher.He is in a gray shirt all through the seasons so I always think the color of gray suits him best.He is a reserved man of average height, with little smile on his face.He is casual with everything and never forces us to take notes or to do many assignments.In his class, everyone feels relaxed.His low-sounding voice flows quietly through our minds, like streams, washing our hearts up with the literary sentences. He strides in and out of the classroom with a blow of breeze.Up to now, I still remember his powerful handwriting.I like his personality, though nowadays Chinese does not receive so much emphasis as other subj ects.But with his guidance, I have learned to appreciate the poems and essays of great vitality.

As I grow up, many teachers have helped me.Professors and lecturers give us more information about society, science and culture.They are fixed in my mind.On the other hand, teachers should also communicate more with students.Thus a better and more efficient relationship could be established.

简评

本文的作者是个有心人，他仔细地观察着身边的老师。文中，作者生动地描述了三位风格迥异的老师——他们的穿着、个性、特别是上课的方式——并做了一定的评价。其中，第一位老师的敬业精神和对学生的严格要求令人肃然起敬；第二位老师照本宣读的教学方式使学生对她的课程毫无兴趣；第三位老师则表现了良好的人文气质，引领学生进入文学世界。如果作者在描写三位老师时注意排列顺序——如时间顺序：小学老师—中学老师—大学老师，文章的结构会更为严密，条理会更加分明。

文章读来自然、流畅，在遣词造句上都展示了良好的语言功底。但是仍有一些句子带有汉语味，如第四段中His low-sounding voice flows quietly through our minds, like streams, washing our hearts up with the literary sentences．这一比喻是汉语的意境，不如改为His low-sounding voice is quite refreshing when he is reading some literary works。

文章的结尾处，作者总结了老师给自己的帮助后，突然提出师生之间应该更多地进行沟通交流，与文章的主旨无关，应该删去。

（点评教师：黄莺）

姓名：张嫣

学号：0 1 42040